Hello!
.my name is shani and I am 15 years old
,I live in Israel and I am very happy for that
because Israel is a beautiful country.
.I am a very companionship(ww.) person
when I meet my friends we do all the things
.I love like sing,dance and swim
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In my spare time i usually help to my mother
to clean the house and sometimes play with
. my little brother in cards
I learn(ww.) in high school "kugle", and I think
that this school is very good, but I don't love
that there are 4 buildings it so confuse(gr,) .
to clean the house and sometimes play with
. my little brother in cards
I learn(ww.) in high school "kugle", and I think
that this school is very good, but I don't love
that there are 4 buildings it so confuse(gr,) .
The subjects that i love to learn in school
.are biology,chemistry and Spanish
- .The subject that i don't love is physics
You have to explain why. You don't just write a statement and move on without explaining why
My expectations for this coming year are:
1)I will get good grades
2)That the matriculation examinations will not be
too hard for meAvoid writing lists, this is supposed to be an essay not a list of things to do.
too hard for meAvoid writing lists, this is supposed to be an essay not a list of things to do.
Shani, this is too short and dull. There is not enough information about you and things you like or dislike. Your last paragraph is not even a paragraph, it's a short list.
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For conclusion,I hope that you enjoy from your reading
and learn some new things about me.This is not a concluding paragraph, it's just a sentence.
*I had some problems with the symbols vocalization,
so I hope you understand .
It's just not enough. Your paragraphs are too short and superficial and you have a problem with phrasing your sentences correctly
Daphna
